(On the C3 forum Hammond Eggar went through the painstaking process of transcribing one of Moe's appearances on The Mike Douglas Show. Despite the fact that Hammond did not have to do this, and that it was very time-consuming, John Coxbeck feels the need to give him advice on how to do it, and hilarity ensues!)
ISLIPP Posted - 8 July 2001 17:34
Great job thus far, Hammond! You've got me felling like I'm thirstily
crawling through the desert trying to get to where the water is. Some
tips on explaining visuals:
1. Try try to refrain from using the word "then." "And then, he did
this..." "Then everyone clapped".
2. You can make us feel like we're there ourselves by describing how
the lighting is, what people's reactions to things are, the looks of
the set (etc.) If you do it just right, we'll feel like we're right
there in the audience seeing it for ourselves. It's not very hard. If
you want to explain camera angles and closeups and such, go ahead,
because you can even make us feel like we're watching it on TV for
ourselves, by telling us how often the camera shows the audience,
Moe, Ted, Mike, close-ups of objects (etc.). If you want to make us
feel like we're watching it for ourselves, pretend that YOU are the
camera. If you want to make us feel like we;re in the audience,
pretend Your in the audience. In either instance, write it as you see
it. You can even tell us if the audience, guests and/or host looks
tired, excited, moderately happy, or like they wished the building
was more heated or air-conditioned.
That's about all I can think of for now. If you'd rather not use
these tips to perfect the already excellent job you're doing, because
of lack of time or whatever, I'll
understand. It might be more fun for you if you try it.
ISLIPP- in some catNIPP. ®2001
Stooge Posted - 8 July 2001 18:13
That's unnecessary. Plus, that would take longer for Hammond to do,
and he said himself that writing these are time consuming. He's doing
an excellent job already
ISLIPP Posted - 8 July 2001 18:24
I know. I acknowledge his great work and the fact that it's time
consuming, but the tips could make it more fun for him and plus would
add a little professionalism. Also, maybe someone else here could use
these tips in the future. Hammond can already take pride in a job
very well done, I assure you that that's what I believe and meant no
insult to his abilities, or to put any pressure on him to better. I
won't be hurt or angry in the least if he doesn't use the tips. I AM
more than satisfied with how he does now.
ISLIPP today, you slide yesterday. ®2001
Edited by - ISLIPP on 7/8/2001 6:28:18 PM
sickdrjoe Posted - 8 July 2001 18:31
Who the f*ck are YOU to upbraid ANYBODY ELSE on
their 'professionalism'? Particularly when your first 'tip' on syntax
is "Try try to refrain from using the word 'then.'" Hey, THERE'S some
solid English usage.
metaldams Posted - 8 July 2001 18:41
That Pie Eyed Metal Guy Who Trips The Light Fantastic Elevator
Style - METALDAMS
ISLIPP Posted - 8 July 2001 18:53
I MEANT WELL, OKAY?
? Forgive me if I've wronged anyone, I'm only
ISLIPP- you slide. ®2001
Hammond Eggar Posted - 8 July 2001 19:0
Don't worry, ISLIPP. I know you meant well. Thank you for the
suggestion. If I can, I will try to incorporate your ideas into
future posts. I am glad that everyone is enjoying this so far.
As always. . .
Keep On Stoogin'!
Boa Posted - 8 July 2001 19:52
ISLIPP, who died and left you master of ceremonies? Hammond's a good
egg for doing this stuff for us and THEN you have to steal the
limelight by trying to promote a superior use of grammar! You just
keep getting more ridiculous. Isn't it time you crawled under a rock
and hibernated for a while? Give us a break!
ISLIPP slaps- himself in the face! ©2001
ISLIPP Posted - 8 July 2001 20:12
Listen, I mentioned on and off in the past that I'm into writing. I
know probably most of the ins and outs of it now. I'm not picking on
Hammond, I'm not downgrading his work in the slightest. No matter how
good anyone is at whatever they attempt, even when they've perfected
it, there will always be someone that's better at it. No matter how
good anyone is at something, there will always be room for
improvement. That's life. I have seen many instances where unasked
for advice was appreciated. So with my kind heart and knowledge of
writing, I decided to extend a helping hand. Hammond did say that
transcribing a scene that's that visual will be hard. At least
Hammond himself understood, (thanks Hammond for the post by the way)
and showed that he knew I meant well and that he valued my
suggestion. So you, Boa are a little out of order and I am all IN
order. One more thing- I think Boa must be Squid McGuffey. Note the
similar style. The name Boa is probably new to everyone else as it is
to me, and obviously this poster's been around for awhile. Whatever
the situation Boa, I think I'm on to you. Come clean.
ISLIPP- get a GRIPP! ®2001
Edited by - ISLIPP on 7/9/2001 1:47:12 AM
sickdrjoe Posted - 8 July 2001 20:41
OH...MY...DEAR...GOD. (Suffice it to say I'm downloading this entire
page for my offline
Further, deponent saith not.
Boa Posted - 9 July 2001 5:4
Sheesh, Slipp, can your head fit through doorways? I probably
shouldn't have spoken up, because Slipp can never fail to get the
last word in. But I couldn't let his
"cock-of-the-walk" attitude go unchallenged.
And, no, Sherlock, I'm not Squid McGuffey. Put that in your pipe and
smoke it! Pththhththththt!(The Raspberries).
ISLIPP opens mouth- and inserts foot! © 2001
ISLIPP Posted - 9 July 2001 7:53
Now I have no idea watsoevr where you or sickdrjoe or anyone ever got
this cock-of-the-walk crap. I don't consider myself superior to
anyone around here. If your
real name is Boa, go constrict yourself.
ISLIPP- don't be a DRIPP. ®2001
sickdrjoe Posted - 9 July 2001 9:19
Jeez, Boa, you've got a nerve! Norman Mail-it-in's just giving the
rest of us greenhorns the benefit of his vast knowledge of writing
made EZ - he's figured out most of the ins and outs, as you know -
and your sarcasm...well, it's just no help watsoevr!